OK, a Second possible ad- feedback please?

OK, a Second possible ad- feedback please?

Hello all you lovely folks out here on DG, I just wanted to say that I posted the first ad on Craigslist the other day, and haven't gotten a single response,...
I'm writing another ad to post, hopefully later today, and I wanted your feedback on it, If I could.
Here it is...

A wise and very wealthy man once said, “Be Greedy when others are Fearful, Be Fearful when others are Greedy,”
My name is Susan Snook, and what I need is the person who is Smart enough to recognize when others are being Greedy or Fearful, and Brave enough to take advantage of those cycles.
Are you that person?
Are you the person who will boldly walk up to a Real Estate Agent and tell them that your client is putting in a bid some XX% below the asking price of their property? Are You the person who will bring me a dozen truly great deals in a week? Are You the person who won’t mind phone calls in the early evening or weekends to get a deal done? Are you the person who has worked with investors before, and enjoys the challenge of finding those “Great deals” that I am searching for? Are you the person who can look outside the box and find creative ways to make deals happen? Are you the person who will help me close deals every month? Are you the person who wants to make money, working at my side?
If you think I’m crazy, then read no further and move on.
If you can answer these questions with an honest and hearty “YES!”, then call me at 1-XXX-XXX-XXXX and leave me a detailed message, outlining your experience and knowledge.

The kinds of properties I’m currently looking for are as follows:

Single Family homes, 3-4 bedrooms
1-2 baths, at least 1,000 Sq ft.
Duplexes and Triplexes will be considered
No mobile homes at this time
No homes built before 1976
No vacant lots
Located in RXXXX/XXXXXXs
Low crime neighborhoods

OH, And the wise and wealthy man I quoted earlier? Warren Buffet, Multi-Billionaire.

Much thanks to all of you out here in the DGForums!


I really AM looking for feedback...

Honestly folks! I want to hear what you all have to say! Is this ad too much of a "Throw down the gauntlet" challenge? or Will the strong wording help stir someone to make the call and see if they can rise to this challenge?

Please, I need all the help I can get.
Much thanks
Susan S.

Hmm, it was a good read, but

Hmm, it was a good read, but isn't it better to be short, straight, and direct? I remember watching the RBB from DG and what I remember is him saying to have things short and straight to the point. I've only just started however, so maybe wait for a few more replies from other people because I'm not sure if they would agree with me. Looks promising though, and good luck!

Hi Susan, It's very good.

Hi Susan,

It's very good. However, it seems a bit dramatic and I don't know how REAs would relate to that.

I would suggest straight and to the point. Lay out what you're looking for, since it's good to be specific.

If you'd like to see an example of what I mean, let me know. But either way you decide, I'm sure you'll do great and have amazing success Smiling Good luck!


In Christ alone, I place my trust.

It seemed to get very

It seemed to get very repetitive about 1/3 of the way though it. It seems as though you are trying to be an infomercial instead of an investor. Try to reword it to use statements instead of questions. Also, Real Estate agents don't look for all the deals for you, but will send you many properties, so maybe that sentence could be worded differently. Just be direct and succinct. "I am an investor, this is what I am looking for in an agent. If you fit this description and would like to represent me, call/email me at ." This is the format I used to find an agent. I also stereotyped towards younger agents, as older agents tend to have more experience, which means they tend to be less likely to change habits.


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If I came across this AD I would not read it cuz Its just to long..
Not trying to be mean, thats just what I would do..You need to just make it short and sweet..I have post a couple of AD more than half the size and My Email and phone is just blown up..

Just wondering why...

you are using Craigslist list this way....

Silly question... have you exhausted all of your "calling the local agents" option?
If not, then I think you may be wasting precious marketing time in this manner. Also, I'm not sure that agents are on Craigslist looking to work their tails off for us investors.... are they?
I'm not sure that it's the "message" so much as it may be the "marketing avenue" that's the problem.
My opinion.... try calling the local R.E. offices that Matt suggests and find that agent yourself... instead of hoping that they will be looking for you!

Good luck and happy hunting =-)

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